gray, strong, and big
defending, fighting, runs
protects, territory, and pack
I liked how you used good word choice in the poem. You also really described what a wolf does, described what they look like, and what there life is based on.
i liked your poem because it described and fitted the format. I also liked because it was one of my favorite animals.
I really liked how you used very good word choice. I also like how you described what a wolf is. If I never knew what a wolf was and I read this poem I would have a way better idea!
This poem is fantastic and has very good description. I can get a vivid picture in my head of what wolves look like.
i love the way you descibe them so well it is like i can visualize them while reading this poem
I love your word choice
My bike looked like a crime.
The bike had some bad times.
It meets a cat that couldn’t help.
It came to the end when he made his last yelp.
To get him released into the world beyond.
So one day he met a sock at dawn.
That was not at any ordinary dock.
So then he made his rest of the day in the rock.
I like your poem, Trent. It follows the format. But, it makes no sense to me. First you are talking about a bike that looked like a crime and had bad times. Then, you are talking about a cat that it met that couldn't help. That it came to end when it made its last yelp. Then your talking your bike, or the cat, meeting a sock at dawn. I getting a little confused. Here is how I understand it: Your bike is old and rusty. Somehow, it helped a cat. The next day it met a sock at dawn on a dock and rested on a rock. It's just confusing so many thing sock, rock, cat... Other than that, great job with the format.
Hey Trent I really loved your poem. I didn't agree with Marissa at all on this one. It made perfect sence to me I loved how you used great format. My favorite part was when you talked about the sock. Great job Trent!
fifteen hundred and two
men were stuck in a shoe
at first they tried
then they died
hope it doesn't happen to you
I really liked how your poem rhymed and flowed together, but I feel bad for those 1502 men that died in that shoe. I have one question though, how did you come up with the idea, it's very creative. One other thing you repeated 1502 men, is the frist one the title and the second one the start of the poem?
THISE POEM IS VERY GOOD BUT FOR THE FOURTH LINE PUT BUT IN FRONT BUT OTHER THEN THAT ITS GOOD.
Out of my house
Into the car
Out of Waterford
Turn the street
Up the drive way
Out of the car
Into the little house
Are my dear grandparents
I love that your poem is about a journey and somewere that you love. Well even that you dont love it the poem sounds really good and I wouldnt change one single thing. Perfect the way it is so dont change it.
Thank you, Dana! I do like to vist my grandparents. That is why I wrote a poem about it. Thank you very much! :}
Danish Dolphin, Daisy, danced dreamily
Donna didn’t dare to dream
Daisy danced with Dash and Dream
Donna always dreamed of dolphins
Donna knew these Danish Dolphins were real.
The air is humid
The sun is out and smiling
Summer is coming
I like your use of personification using the sun and how it smiled. This does symbolize that summer is coming :( :( and you also followed the format, this is very well done. Keep up the good work.
I like how your poem falows the format and how it show that your excited for summer.
There once was an old crabby bee
Who thought he had seen a flee
But much for his surprise
It appeared before his eyes
He felt so bad he started to lean
I think it is VERY cute because it's about a bee. I have one question though, why is it about a bee? In other words you are very good at writing poems as well as everybody else. I hope one day you can write a poem about me!! :}
Thanks Lexi and of course I will write about you. what else would I write about.;)
I like your topic i thing it that it is simple and cute.
There was an old flamingo.
He vary much liked bingo.
He had a big beard.
His beard was vary weird.
He belonged to a man named dingo.
I liked it! Your rhymes are humerous and they really flow well. "A Flamingo" is light-hearted and funny. Nice job!
i liked it Carson it was funny and rhymed well.
Just For Today
Just for today I will change the way I think of people.
Just for today I will not doubt myself, but raise the bar higher.
Just for today I will help out for free, because it’s right.
Just for today I will be a group worker instead of independent.
Just for today I’ll be a role model instead of a bad example.
Just for today I will hold back mean feelings and respect who they really are.
Just for today I will think back to people that helped save America and thank them for their hard work and braveness, and believing that nobody can interrupt your path.
Just for today I will think about what events could change America tomorrow.
Daughter of Lew and Rose.
Lover of Adam Lambert because he has such a pure, natural voice. He is who he is and he's proud of it. He's not afraid to speak his mind and stay true to himself. I need that in my life.
Who feels that reality is the hardest thing to face. Sometimes you want to be secluded in your own fantasy world for a little while just to catch a break.
Who needs people who are respectful of my views. They're what make me unique, and you can't punish me for that.
Who gives out what I want to be given. I treat people the way I want to be treated. Shouldn't it be that way?
Who fears that I won't fit in. Everybody's different, but some people seem to fit in more than others. Sometimes I wish I was like that.
Who would like to see equality because there are so many people that don't have it but deserve it. Everybody deserves to be treated with respect.
Smooth wood is the Forrest.
Green leaves falling all around.
Also slowly turning orange.
The Old Man
There was a old man who wanted to tan
so he layed in the nice cool sand
he went out to the hot as a suna outside
he ran in lato a lady and they felt their love collide
together they ran
Theres a little girl
How ranaway in her sleep
the once was a cat
she was wearing a hat
her name was blue
she got the flu
the cat lost her hat
I love your poem. It is just so great
Once there was a boy who ate a pickle
he ate it for a nickel
I don't think he should've
If I were him I wouldnt've
Because it made him very ill
Silly sandy slipped on slimy snail slim
While skipping she skipped slowly in the store
Sally and Sam
Sally sat by sally singing songs
Sally eats sausage while Sam eats salmon
Sam screams because Sally sat on sam
Sally and sam are sisters
Sam says lets go swimming
Sally says ok
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.