Winter break is on its way
It will be the best day
The gifts are ready to customize
My sister got a great surprize
My present was extremely frilly
It made me feel very silly
My brother threw a big fit
Then he needed the first aid kit
funny poem, my favorite lines are the last 2!
I like the rhymes, and it's a great poem, but what type of poem is it?
I can answer that. This poem is a couplet.
I liked how you made the poem end with the same letters at the end of each line. You did a great job! :)
When I read this poem I hear the singing and tearing of gifts on Christmas
Frees you from the solid ground
Lets the energy inside unleash
It can make your heart stop
Gripping your wings and spirit
Higher you go, and you smile
Tell me how you feel
The playground is open on school hours
The equipment is only ours
Kids always play a game of football
Why don’t the ever play baseball?
If the could hit far, they have superpowers!
I like your poem but what do you mean by hitting far with a baseball or Football?
I like how you describe the playground.
H- Searching in the forest for deer.
U- Under the leaves hiding in a tree stand.
N- Never zoning off, just watching for whitetail.
T- Tense is the action that I feel.
I- In a tree to bag a buck.
N- Next, a deer walks up with a doe.
G- Going home with a monster buck.
I put searching because hunting was the acrostic word.
I was wondering about that, otherwise nice job!
Lance, I'm not trying to be rude, but searching doesn't start with H.
I like the poem how its about hunting and you like to go hunting
F- Fabulous to spend time playing
O- Overrated players get to much money
O- Over happy touchdown celebration
T- Tall people make it into the NFL
B- Ball is pigskin shaped like an oval
A- Amazingly fast players gain yards
L- Large linemen block for the quarterback
L- Loud fans are all over the statium
F- Fling the line goes out
I- Inch by inch it travels
S- Splash the bobber hits
H- Hook its a huge one
I- Inch by inch it comes in
N- Net gets the fish in the boat
G- Going home with a lot of fish
I like how you had really good word choice!!
When I went home from the summer.
I knew some people thought it was a bummer.
I can see swans swimming in the pond.
They were swimming till the dawn.
I can see fireworks in the sky.
Then they were over it was time to say good-bye
I see flowers starting to die
Because of the firework ashis left in the sky.
If I were an animal I would be a wolf
because they have a lot of intuition
If I were a car I would be a Corvette
because it is everyones dream
If I were a city I would New york City
because they have really good food
If I were a pet I would be a German
Shepherd because they are clever
If I were a food I would be a cookie because they are really yummy
If I were a planet I would be earth because it has life on it
If I were a building I would be Twin towers because they are getting rebuilt to be stronger
If I were a famous person I would be Forrest griffin because he is a great fighter
If I were a sport I would be motorcross because it is really dangerous
If I were a machine I would be me because I like being me
If I were a tree I would be a weeping willow because they are peculiar
I like how you put so much thought into this and it makes it really special.
I liked how you put so much thought into this andit makes it so special.
The moon illuminates the sky tonight.
The shining sphere was quite a sight.
The winter frost, covers the ground.
In the deep dark night, you hear every sound.
The flowers, all drooping and grey.
Just waiting, for the light of day.
The trees, also cold and dead.
The fear of dark, is poisonous, like lead.
Through the day
out the door
threw my backpack
out the window
up the stairs
down the hall
jumped into bed
flew the summer
Every thing sounds good except for the last line. it says flew the summer. i don't know if you meant to do that or if you tried to do flew through the summer.
I have the orange bobber in sight
Then I feel a strong bite
After the fish made the pole jerk
I knew this fish was going to make me work
As I was pulling it up to shore
In my head this was a huge score
I had realized i had caught an enormous bass
It’s now mounted on the wall behind the glass
I dribble down the court
Thinking in my head it’s my favorite sport
Should I take the shot
Or should I not
Now the game is on me
Adin, I like your your poem! It makes me picture you doing this once school is over. The poem makes me excited for summer to come.
Cool, nice, poisonous, fierce
Comforting, slithering, gliding
Past the window in my room,
Through the door into the hall,
Out of the room running quickly,
Down the stairs very fast,
Into the kitchen with a glide,
Within the wall, the framework,
Around the tight corner, snatching my shoulder,
Inside the other wall lives a spider.
too hot for summer
jumping into the pool now
ice cream is so cold
Your poem is really good just make sure you capitalize you letters.
Under the willow
Runing past the creepy tree
Lies a bed of grass
With the lick of blue moon
I had to turn on a tune
Then I got dirty so i took a shower
After the shower I smelled like a flower
Ice cream ice cream is very cold
After a while it will start to mold
The blue moon go all over my shirt
Then it was worse because I went in the dirt.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.